Yes, that is rather gay. Perhaps you should try a revision.
Maybe some of these will help you:
David Mascellani
06-02-2002, 03:20 AM
Yeah,
I ate
the plums
that were in
the icebox
and which
you were probably
saving
for yourself
They were off
and made me sick
expect to hear
from my lawyers
http://www.poets.org/poems/poems.cfm?prmID=1380
----
Clive2
06-02-2002, 04:07 AM
"This is Just To Say - Eminem remix"
So what?
I ate
the fuckin' plums
that were in
the fuckin' icebox
and which
you were prolly
savin'
for yourself
but fuck you,
Kim, you muthafucka
don't you tell me
what to fuckin' do.
----
David Mascellani
06-02-2002, 06:50 AM
lol. Thanks Clive.
This Is Just To Say- David Lynch
I have put red slippers
on the dwarves
that were in
the icebox
and which
you were probably
saving
for some weird kinky dance.
Forgive me
They ran away
leaving me
talking to a hunchback from 'Vegas.
----
David Mascellani
06-02-2002, 09:32 AM
This is just to say- William. S. Burroughs
You were probably saving breakfast so sweet
and so cold Forgive me the plums I have eaten
delicious and which for that were in the icebox they were.
Clive2
06-02-2002, 12:29 PM
WCW - Slacker version
Wet chickens,
wheelbarrow,
cold plums
yadda yadda - like, whatever...
----
gecian
06-02-2002, 12:42 PM
WCW passed through Word thesaurus:
I have devoured
the roundish fleshy fruit
that existed in
the fridge
and which
you were putatively
emancipating
for breakfast
Exonerate me
they were palatable
so mawkish
and so dead
----
Sarah Kath
06-02-2002, 06:39 PM
Now here's the original WCW poem, a la Web translator (English to
German to English):
THIS IS JUST TO SAY
I have eaten
the plums
which were in
the refrigerator,
and which
you likely
saved
for the breakfast,
they forgive at me
were delicious
so sweetly
and so coldly
----
Kevin Andrew Murphy
06-02-2002, 09:18 PM
Run through the Swedish chef program:
Thees Is Joost Tu Sey
Veelliem Cerlus Veelliems
I hefe-a ietee
zee plooms thet
vere-a in zee icebux
und vheech yuoo vere-a
prubebly sefeeng
fur breekffest
Furgeefe-a me-a
zeey vere-a
deleeciuoos
su sveet und su culd
----
Kevin Andrew Murphy
06-02-2002, 10:54 PM
This Is Just To Say
(Hannibal Lechter, to Jeffrey Dahmer)
I have eaten
the "plums"
that were in
the icebox
and which
you were probably
saving
for breakfast
Forgive me
they were delicious
so sweet
and so cold
----
David Mascellani
06-03-2002, 06:25 AM
I have snipped
the poem
that I posted
to this thread
and which
you were probably
saving
to read later
Forgive me
it was crap
so crappy
and so full of crap
----
Clive2
06-03-2002, 11:06 AM
WCW by Pink Palace regular: -
i have et
the plum's
that were in
the icebox
http://www.everypoet.com/poetry/poetry_forums/frown.gif
and whish
u were porbubly
saving
for braekfast
http://www.everypoet.com/poetry/poetry_forums/rolleyes.gif
forgive me
http://www.everypoet.com/poetry/poetry_forums/smile.gif
thay were delisious
so sweet
and so cold
http://www.everypoet.com/poetry/poetry_forums/biggrin.gif
----
OpenMyEyes
06-03-2002, 01:57 PM
Tarzan say- Edgar Rice Burroughs
I have sniffed
the carcasses
that were in
the jungle
and keenly
identified that you were
saving
them for breakfast
Forgive me
they were delicious
so bloody
and so raw
----
Originally posted by David Mascellani:
This is just to say- William. S. Burroughs
You were probably saving breakfast so sweet
and so cold Forgive me the plums I have eaten
delicious and which for that were in the icebox they were.
----
Kevin Andrew Murphy
06-04-2002, 01:36 AM
Say This Is To Just
by Yoda
plums have I
eaten the
that in the
icebox were
and probably
which
for breakfast
saving were you
Forgive me
delicious they were
MMMMMM!
sweet so
and cold so
----
Howard Miller
06-04-2002, 07:50 AM
You got
nothing
on me
I was
home asleep
I got
character witnesses
who'll swear
I don't
like plums
so what
would I want
with three--
Look, if I
fill you in
on that wheelbarrow
caper,
maybe we can
cut
a deal?
----
Howard Kaem
06-04-2002, 08:05 AM
I have eaten
the plums
that were in
the icebox
Forgive me
but I was
tired of hacking
up chickens
The wheelbarrow
was too bloody
red from chicken
carcasses already
----
pimpy moon
06-06-2002, 02:31 AM
This Is Just To Say
- Darth Vadar
Hunger leads to the icebox,
the icebox leads to the plums
and the plums lead to the darkside.
Eat the plums, Luke,
it is your destiny.
Join me,
together we can eat breakfast
as father
and son.
----
dagonee
06-06-2002, 10:28 PM
This Is Just To Say (Memento version)
and so cold
so sweet
they were delicious
Forgive me
for breakfast
saving
you were probably
and which
the icebox
that were in
the plums
I have eaten
----
Urizen
06-07-2002, 04:32 PM
Second Memento version:
This is just...
wait
to say that...
hold on
Plums?
What plums?
Why are you
looking at me
like that?
----
Clive2
06-08-2002, 01:30 AM
Homer Simpson version
D'oh!
I ate the plums.
Mmmmmm...plums.
----
Kaem
06-08-2002, 04:44 AM
Star Trek version:
I...ate...
the...plums...
so...sweet...
so...cold...
They're dead,
Jim.
----
Urizen
06-09-2002, 12:16 AM
Gertrude Stein version:
I have have I have I
have eaten the have eaten the plums
in the ice box of ice of box ice
I have I have have I eaten
have I which where which which therefore
you were probably saving for
saving for you were probably saving for wherefore
you were saving for breakfast for
Oh forgive me me forgive forgive
for they were so because so because because
so delicious forgive me so delicious wherefore
they were so delicious so cold so delicious cold so
cold I have I.
----
pimpy moon
06-09-2002, 07:34 AM
Julius Caesar Version
Veni, vedi, edi plums
----
Roge
06-09-2002, 04:32 PM
The Romeo and Juliet version
But soft!
What light from yonder
window breaks?
It is the fridge
and Juliet is eating plums.
See how she holds them
in her cheek.
O that they were my plums
that I may feel that cheek.
----
weatheringdaleson
06-09-2002, 10:53 PM
"I'm Just Saying"
by David Mamet
I'm just saying.
I ate the plums
the freezer.
For breakfast,
saving for, listen,
no, list-- oh fuck
me.... I'm... I...
forgive me, for breakfast.
Sorry. Forgi-- Cold.
Yeah, cold.
And delicious.
----
Humanoid
06-17-2002, 07:47 PM
Aussie version
Good'ay mate,
grabed me some plums
from the freezer
probly kept it for later
but don't worry
they tasted like dingos dun
Now you'll get it mate
for I'll sue you
for giving me that dun
LauraDawn
06-18-2002, 02:39 AM
Just thought you should know -
The plums -
Yea - the ones in the icebox...
Well...
They went away.
Sue me.
----
soybomb
06-23-2002, 07:41 PM
Cartman (South Park) version:
Goddammit Kenny!
Those are my plums!
Just because you're on welfare
doesn't mean you can eat my plums!
Screw you guys,
I'm going home.
----
John H. Freeman
06-24-2002, 06:47 PM
Billy Bob Thornton version
Allrite then
Thiz'iz justa say
I'm on tha way ta'tha hospitle
I broke my jaw
an it's a stikin out
I ate them big grapes
In the frigerater...
Lordy mercy tha'uz sweet.
If them was your grapes
I'm sorry
They'uz so big
an purple
I just cudn't rezist havin a bite
Allrite then
I'll seeya t'nite
----
Roge
06-24-2002, 09:27 PM
John Wayne Bobbit to his wife Lorena.
Hey
whose are these
hairy plums
in the icebox?
Wot you mean,
building
the perfect man?
Hey!
Careful
with that
knife...
----
Mephitic ID Synergy
06-25-2002, 02:42 AM
"This is Just to Say"
by William Clinton
My fellow Americans,
I have not
eaten the plums
from the refrigerator
I knew you were
saving them for later
so I only put them
in my mouth
Forgive me,
the way they sat there
they looked like knockers
I just had to suck 'em.
MB
http://www.everypoet.org/pffa/archive/index.php/t-5472.html
