> The rw crit group i belong to usually just rubber stamps everything i
> write, but several people noted that they didn't understand this
> paragraph --
>
> [in a conversation about the character taking away a rash young man's
> sword in a duel --]
>
> "Yes, but it is not good to repeat it too often or with people of high
> repute. If it is believed likely that I will disarm rather than kill
> my opponent, it may give others the courage to challenge me rashly."
> He paused to brush a speck of lint from his sleeve, seemingly
> unconcerned about the topic under discussion. "I'm afraid, my dear
> Baron, if you and I ever cross swords, I will have to slit you open
> from navel to neck."
>
>
> is that too convoluted, obscure, or weird to be understood